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mother bears us into life
wayward children without regard
who take their mother for their wife
hastening thus their own retard

mother bears us on her back
like ticks and fleas and vermin foul
with solemn patience we still lack
she bears her offspring without scowl

mother bears our mortal shell
Antaeus' blessing and demise
all our hungry lives we dwell
like maggots between mother's thighs

mother bears our scattered ashes
while we her body outconsume
and if we perish ere she crashes
our dust returns to mother's womb
©2007-2009 ~UncleBrazzie
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Author's Comments

Part 3 in the Celestial Bodies series.
It's bitterly poetic that we seem to have outconsumed Earth, even on a poetic level. It's all been said and done before, I feel, and still we keep at it.

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~Felix-Forever Aug 6, 2007, 12:44:30 PM
Amen! Some nice ABAB poetry.
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~enge-tzehai Aug 6, 2007, 11:24:58 PM
Il ike it, nothing wrong here. I kept reading "mother bears" as "mother bear" but that gives this poem just another dimension...
Even though you wrote what has been written before, it still is different, gives its own view.
Well done!

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~UncleBrazzie Aug 7, 2007, 1:14:07 AM
Heeheehee "mother bears" roooooaaaar :p

Cheerz m'dear!

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~UncleBrazzie Aug 7, 2007, 1:22:45 AM
Cheerz buddy!

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Bork! Bork! Bork!
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Mood: dA Love ~Sublimis Oct 10, 2007, 12:04:35 PM
The poem is beautiful, especially since I am very concerned about Earth and the environment. I feel like you reflected the real condition of Earth, and that is great.
:)

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Only those who attempt the absurd will achieve the impossible. I think it's in my basement... let me go upstairs and check.
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~UncleBrazzie Oct 10, 2007, 10:46:43 PM
Why thank you :)

In fact, the only thing I really like about the poem it its imagery. The rhyme structure is perhaps my least favourite of all (boring old ABAB) but somehow, that's how it came out so I'm loath to change it.

And yes, we treat the earth with less respect than we should. How can it be any other way if we don't even respept ourselves, neither as individuals, nor as a species as a whole.

Thanks for commenting, m'dear :D

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